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    Good small systems

    I don't have under 10 pages, but I have a free, fairly complete ruleset in 32: https://gruszczy.itch.io/modern-adventuring-plunder
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    Seeking feedback on evocative writing

    @Malrex Thanks a lot, this is extremely valuable! I will make the adjustments and also go through the rest of the module to see if I can apply the learnings.
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    Seeking feedback on evocative writing

    @tetramorph Thanks a lot for the kind words! I am following the advice from http://www.tenfootpole.org/forum/index.php?threads/1-1-terseness-rewrite-1.43/, specifically example 3: "The Fortress of the Fungi Chemist, from The Lizard Man Diaries blog, takes an interesting approach to achieving...
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    Seeking feedback on evocative writing

    @The1True Thanks! I like Gruetzi's format, I am going for something similar.
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    Seeking feedback on evocative writing

    Beoric: Thanks a lot for the suggestions! Having a second pair of eyes helps a lot! Missing needles, what is royal, foreboding - I will definitely work on this. Telegraphing the danger: This is not a level 1-3 module, but 5-7, so I expect experienced players and Detect Traps/Detect Magic/Detect...
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    Seeking feedback on evocative writing

    I am trying to work on evocative writing for the next module I am writing. I wanted to ask for feedback for a sample of my work, to get a sense of what I should focus on. Below a re sample 4 room from one of the levels. G9: Dread Tailor Three wooden dummies sport half-finished royal garments...
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    1.20 Concrete Descriptions

    "As you approach it, the fog churns into ominous shapes" Isn't ominous in the same category as strange? Or is it redeemed here because it's more evocative than simple strange?
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